Tuesday, February 26, 2008
Blog 8 Simon's death
I had to see the mountain I had to see for my self if the beast was real or if was just a figment of my imigination. As soon as I had gotten there I realized the corruption that there was on this island seeing as how Jakc and his tribe worship such a thing somthing that does not even exist and that they fear it as well. Through out history there has never been any religion built of fear unless they disobyed the rules or laws of thier god(s). This is simply an embersment of humanity. I almost pity them......except for the fact that they worship somthing that they think would kill them but they think it will later in my story but lets keep up with what was going on then. As I uncioled the man from the vines I thought poor man only to hope thta winds would take him and he could move on to the next life. Im glad that the beast has not taken the mind of Ralph and his followers unfourtently its starting to. *laugh* ahh that Piggy probobly the most tremulous one of the bunch. I have a bad feeling about him though. Not that he will end up anyhting like Jack but that he himself is in danger of joining me......I not only fear for Piggy but also fear Ralph and his followers will join me simply by thinking back by what they did to me. Still remember the vivid memory of thier fists even though it was at night time, I remember my own warm blood trickling down my cheek which was the warmest thing at the time. As soon as I saw them running at me I knew they were steadfast with the decision to beat me down but the faster I got through my head the easier it was to accept death. Finally I could go bakc to somthing less materialistc and just hope for the best as to what happens to the boys on the island. Hopefully I won't seem them for a while........
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Anthony,
I really liked the way you showed Simon in this blog. It is definitely a side of Simon that I would have never seen without reading your blog.
Your blog was enjoyable to read but some of your spelling errors made it hard to read. Also in the middle the story kind of veers off of the path and on the something else. In this paragraph is where i saw it the most.
"Jack and his tribe worship such a thing something that does not even exist and that they fear it as well. Through out history there has never been any religion built of fear unless they disobeyed the rules or laws of thier god(s). This is simply an embersment of humanity. I almost pity them......"
This sentence also did not make sense to me
"except for the fact that they worship something that they think would kill them but they think it will later in my story but lets keep up with what was going on then."
All in all i liked your blog you just have to be sure to watch your spelling and some of the ways you word things.
-- Katie Brooks
This was a good blog, but it kind of got confusing. Like this sentence:
I almost pity them......except for the fact that they worship somthing that they think would kill them but they think it will later in my story but lets keep up with what was going on then.
There were also some spelling and grammatical errors, and some of the sentences seemed to end when the thought wasn't finished, and start talking about something else. I'm also not sure if you used steadfast right.
You also start out in present tense and end in past tense, which is confusing.
I think you should add more about how simon felt when he was killed.
You also forgot to include the conversation with the Lord of the Flies.
I liked how you talked about how simon worried that Ralph, Piggy, and the others dying and joining Simon.
Overall this was a pretty good blog and I enjoyed reading it.
Your blog was good I could feel I was Simon and it is one of your best.
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